Tuesday, 22 February 2011

Velocity...

There’s a nameless madman on a line in the middle of an entry,
Goes by the name Lamont, with a resident grin on his gate,
Lamentably, he tells a passing obtuse pig-like mademan,
To distribute his grunts in his own way, if it’s sadness he’s after,
He’ll find it in his wake, circling the dead with daft laughter,
This madman later tells, with his third eye, a passing unmade man,
Who idles in his half-mast uniform trousers, at a high internal velocity,
Not to follow or fall foul of the mademan with sadness in his wake,
As there, in the mournful circle, he’ll be fiddling profoundly with his fate,
But to quicken his step and stand by him, soundly in the middle ground,
Formed at an angle not out of sight, between the mademan at his wake
And the madman perpendicular in his entry with the grin on his gate.

10 comments:

jana1641 said...

This is grand! I guess we all go a little mad now and then at least through it all we learn where we stand. Thanks Sean love it...

Seán McGrady said...

Your comment is very welcome Jana. I like the word "grand"...and learning where we "stand" is very much at the centre of my poetry...
Thanks again...

seán

~Ellie Kings~ said...

Your work is too profound for me, if that's ever considered a compliment. :) Love it!

Seán McGrady said...

I am so pleased that it touched you in some measure Ellie. Many thanks !!

eileencorcoran said...

I choose the madman. No compromise!!

karina said...

Had to read this, if only because I used to ride a Velocette Venom! Sorry, but that is the way my mind works...trying to imagine "idling at a high internal velocity", and wonder if that is possible? Very provocative and intense writing. Will have to read one every morning to give me something to mull on other than handbags!!

Hala Hoagland, a writing rose, Aka Al-Logaha Hand said...

excellent force of language-to be a bit mad, un-made and of a new man kind, that's the step this wo-man prefers to take, I really like this one Seàn...

Sylvia said...
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Sylvia said...

Hey Seán,this is a fascinating poem. I find I can read it on more than one level, because it seems to come full circle, with the madman using his third eye (I have one, BTW, not kidding)to give advice to a passing unmade man, but then the madman appears to be "out of himself" in that perpendicular position in your finale. Sort of schizoid profile, maybe they're all the same man...and not quite knowing where he/they stand. I could say more, but don't want to get kicked out of here...Greetings from Buenos Aires!

Seán McGrady said...

Sylvia..Many thanks for your very interesting comment. Splendidly reading my mind...but I believe you are thinking philosophically here, and so are grasping the ideas at work in the poem. I wish you would say more, but what you did say was so pertinent. The "unity" of individualty is central to the poem...